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Post  Nano511 on Mon Jun 29, 2009 8:00 pm

This is [u]The Unseen[/u] in greater detail.


Character Image list
-Assassins 1,2, and 3:Elite, primary color black, secondary color dark purple, dark blue, and red, combat with commando shoulders.
-Assassins boss: Spartan, Primary color silver, secondary white, security shoulders, mark V head, and mark VI body.
-Bosses for Big companies:Spartan,Primary color white, secondary white, EVA shoulders, ODST head, mark VI body.
-S.W.A.T Soldiers: Spartan, primary color sage, secondary color black, EOD shoulders,
scout head, and CQB body.
-FBI officers- Spartan, all black, full mark VI
-Police officers-Spartan, primary color blue, secondary color red, detail color white, full mark VI


[b]On a scale from 1/10, ten being the highest, i rated their importance [/b] and their voice types come after the number
Character Roles
-Assassin Boss(10)Bristish accent. high/medium
-Assassin 1(9)
-Assassin 2(9)
-Assassin 3(9)
-Bosses of Big companies(really only one person is need for it.)(7)Medium/high
-Employee(2)Medium
-S.W.A.T soldier 1(1)
-S.W.A.T soldier 2(1)
-S.W.A.T soldier 3(1)
-S.W.A.T soldier Raiden(10)Low
-S.W.A.T soldier Mark(10)Medium/high/comical
-S.W.A.T soldier Damon(10)Medium/smart sounding(lol?)
-Civilian(1)Needs all different ranges.
-FBI officer 1(9)medium low
-FBI officer 2(9)medium
-Police officer(5)doesnt matter

Current Plot: The boss of a company that provides everything you could possibly need wants to wipe out all other competition, the hard way. He hires 3 assassins to take out the leaders of the 5 main businesses. After the first leader is taken out, Government gets S.W.A.T and the FBI to track and kill these assassins before anymore havoc breaks out.



EP1
The scene starts with the boss walking through the inside of a base. He turns into the High Grounds where he then his behind some crates

HIDEOUT
Boss: Assassins.....enter.
One by one three assassins walk into the room.
Boss: Ok guys, i need you 3 to kill the President of the clothing department so i can make more money then i already am ok?
The assassins nod and walk out of the room. While walking out they pull out swords.
Boss: I'm so sorry President of clothing, but it's going to end here. Bwuha. Bwuhaha. BWUHAHAHAHA!(coughs)
THEME SONG
The scene shifts to the top of a building in the pit

CLOTHING DEPARTMENT
Clothing: Manager? come in please
Manager: i have a name you-
Clothing President(will be called clothing in script): yeah, anyways, the clothing sales are high. There great!
Manger: Ok, thank-you
Clothing: Don't you want to see the graph?
Manger: No
Clothing: Yes? Okay, it starts on this left side, see?
Manger: I SAID NO.
Clothing: You're sure you don't want to see it?([i]raising pitch with every word[/i]) The arrow goes dramatically uh-up.
Manager: No, I don't. Your car is waiting
Clothing: but-
Manager: YOUR CAR IS WAITING!

The scene switches to above the exit door. The camera switches to right in front of the car as the president gets in. He gets in and shuffles around. The camera pans and you see assassin one in the alley crouched next to a building. When the car moves he darts for the car and runs with it. When it turns left he slashes it knocking it out of control. You then see assassin three hiding. He's high and taking aim with a sniper. The president gets out and he is sniped. The assassins make a getaway. The scene swithches to the bosses hideout.

HIDEOUT
Boss: I saw it on the television. You've done well.
He brings out a brief case that contains the money
Boss: Here's your pay.
The scene switches to two government officials talking

GOVERNMENT BASE
Official 1:This seems very important. He's the owner of a humongous company. He might have been killed by a business owner.
Official 2: It was probably a random killing
Official 1: You think?
Official 2: Yeah, the manager and everyone was there. They wouldn't do it then
Official 1: But it looked planed out
Official 2: Just forget about it. Leave it to the police. It's there job
Official 1: True...I guess.

The scene switches to the bosses hideout. He's watching TV and learns the police is after the assassins.

HIDEOUT
Boss: Sins! I have more dirty work for you! The police are try to butt theirselves into your way. I want you to capture them. I will meet you at the scene.

The scene shifts to two cops chatting( you can't really understand them, lol they just make sounds like the moose in Hard Justice.) there's an opening behind.(They are on the map Last Resort, where the sniper spawns across from the explosives.) Assassin two appears. He slowly approaches the cops while crouching. He then kills them both. The other two jump down and there boss enters the scene.
END EP1

EP 2
GOVERNMENT BASE
Official 1: So, you're smart plan to have the police take the case didn't work
Official 2: I know, two killings. Now I'm sure this wasn't random
Official 1: Yeah smart one
Official 2: Shut-up
Official 1: Whatever. Well we'll need to retrace the presidents steps.
Official 2: president?
Official 1: The man who got shot. He was the clothing department president. so... Yah.
Official 2: Dont you think the FBI is better qualified then us two guys that just work with the government....
Official 1: OH! right... kind of forgot we just work here...darn.
Official 2: w/e, ill get the FBI to you know... investigate

FBI Agents go to the last person to see the president

CLOTHING DEPARTMENT
Agent 2:Freeze
Agent 1: Aren't I supposed to say that. I have the gun
Agent 2: Shut-up
Manager: Guys, I'm still here
Agent 1: Oh yeah sorry. Ok, FBI, were here to ask about the murder of your boss
Agent 2: From what we understand, you were there when the killing took place. What exactly happened?
Manager: Well... I mean... we got in and drove a couple of yards. Then suddenly our car spun out of control! The boss got out of the car to see what happened. Then he was shot from above.
Agent 2: Can you tell us what he was talking about before he died.
Manager: Well, he was talking about a great increase in sales.
Agent 2: So nothing suspicious
Manager: Nope
Agent 1: Did he seem nervous or scared
Manager: No, actually very happy and cheerful
The Agents search the office and find nothing
Agent 2: Thanks for your information. Stay in town.
The officials leave

OUTSIDE OF CLOTHING DEPARTMENT IN CAR
Agent 2:Have a feeling he's up to something
Agent 1: nah, I think he's a nice guy
Agent 2: How'd you get this job in the first place anyways?
Agent 1: You know boss
Agent 2: Yeah
Agent 1: He's my dad
Agent 2: (snickers) so am i.
Agent 1: shut up
The Agents go to the crime scene. After searching for a couple minutes. They find nothing. They move on to the Officers murder scene. The entrance is blocked off.

OUTSIDE THE POLICE DEPARTMENT
Agent 2: Lets bust in.
Agent 1: I have a bad feeling about this.
Agent 2: Why?
Agent 1: cause we're the Federal Burial of [i]Investigation[/i]
Agent 2: oh... So?
Agent 1:...
Agent 2:Wuss, I'm goanna tell your dad how much of a wuss you are
Agent 1: Ok, let's go
They back up.
In unison: 1....2.......3!
The agents ram the door, but it doesnt budge.

INSIDE POLICE DEPARTMENT
Boss: Sins, we need to talk. Tomorrow the president of Comestibles will be at a restaurant tasting there food. We need him dead aswell, so i can make even MORE money.
They all nod. The scene shifts to The Agents crime scene where the agents are still trying to bust the barrier . They take a break.
Agent 2: You hungry
Agent 1: Yeah, there's a restaurant right over there.
They walk toward the restaurant

INSIDE THE RESTAURANT
Waiter: Hello boys, what would you like to order.
Agent 2: How about a Salmon -Chicken delight with some red wine
Agent 1: Um... and I'll get... some smiley face pancakes with a Santa grape drink
Waiter: Sir, that's from the kids breakfast menu
Official 1: Do you know who i am? I am the FBI, and i would like to be served with RESPECT, and to not be judged by the choices of my food, why, one day i believe all vegetarians will sit together at the table of consumers with carnivores. And-
Waiter: Never mind
Assassin one walks by the window the two are sitting by. No one notices. he jumps onto a dumpster and the scene shifts back to the officials.
Official 2: ([i]laughing[/i])Kids menu, he thinks your a retard
Official 1: I don't care
Official 2: Thankfully. mad retards with guns isn't a good combination.
Official 1: Does he really think I'm a retard?
Official 2: Yup
Official 1: ([i]crying[/i]) Then lets go
Official 2: Yeah, lets go
While they leave the president of comestibles is in front of them. President is shot and killed on the spot

OUTSIDE OF RESTAURANT
Agent 1: What the hell!
Agent 2: There! Get him!
They jump into a car. The camera shifts to a wide alley where the assassin have a ghost parked. He gets in and quickly drives right in front of the agents.

INSIDE CAR
Agent 2(driving): Shoot him!
Agent 1 climbs halfway out the window and shoots at him
Agent 2: Get him!
The ghost knocks down many barrels blocking the car and making the car flip. The agent's get out and try to chase on foot, but lose him
Agent 2: Shit, we lost him.

EP3
The agents return to there headquarters
Agent 1:When we saw the President of Comestibles get shot, we jumped in out vehicle and chased after him. He knocked over some barrels and he flipped over them.
FBI Boss:So you're telling me.... that you tripped your vehicle over barrels?
Agent 2: Yes sir.
FBI Boss:And instead of calling me, you came all the way back here to tell me?
Agent 1: actually we never thought of calling you. OH! but, we did find something else.
Before we went to go eat, we were at the police station. And it was completely blocked off.
FBI Boss: You went to go eat?
Agent 2: Yes sir, before we saw the president get shot.
FBI Boss: You, i would fire if you weren't my son. And you, i would fire if you werent my sons only friend!
Agent 2: Im your friend?
Agent 1: by that he means business partner (chuckles nervously)

screen wiggles and goes to a flashback of Agent 1 in his room with Agent 2 posters everywhere and agent 2 life size dolls.
Agent 1: Your my only friend
Agent 2 doll:[i]Deep voice[/i] Hey thanks.
Agent 1: AHHHH!!!
Agent 1 flees the room.

screen wiggles and flashback ends.
FBI Boss: anyways, you two are off the case. im getting SWAT over there to bust in.
screen fades to black, and fades back to the SWAT base.

SWAT officer: Squad 314, suit up, and head to the police department. It'll be blocked off. I want you to bust in, and secure the perimeter.

scene cuts to Mark, Raiden and Damon running down a hallway.
Mark: wait, are we supposed to kill people?
Raiden: No, were supposed to keep the perimeter secure unless something gets out of hand.
Mark: What do you mean "gets out of hand"? are they going to try to shoot at us?
Raiden:(p[i]annoyed[/i]) I dont know!
Mark: So if they try to shoot at us we kill them?
Raiden: Dammit Mark werent you trained?!?
Mark: yeah! but this is my first real situation!
Damon:([i]under his breath[/i]) and possibly your last..

The Hallway leads to a room filled with weapons.

Damon grabs a rocket launcher and some smoke grenades. Raiden picks up a medical kit and a pistol just in case. while Damon and Raiden are getting their weapons and equipment and Mark gets a SMG and a Battle Rifle. The scene cuts to a parking lot. Damon gets into the driver seat of a warthog, and Raiden gets in the passenger seat.
Mark makes his way to the turret.
Raiden: Woah Woah Woah Woah Woah, Mark i dont think its safe for you to stand in a moving vehicle, let alone a turret in your hands.
Mark: Oh...right. So ill just get on the mongoose i guess....
Mark gets on the mongoose and they drive over to the police department.
END OF EP3



credits to imevil for 1st and 2nd episode. ive done the rest because of imevil's recent non-activity.


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Post  and1mastah on Mon Jun 29, 2009 8:07 pm

if your show gets chosen then you are director...

and of course no matter what I will be the producer

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Post  Nano511 on Mon Jun 29, 2009 8:09 pm

Oh. okay lol. so whoever the show is made by is the director?
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Post  and1mastah on Mon Jun 29, 2009 8:16 pm

well yeah..they created it so they have the best vision of what they want to do

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Post  imevil on Mon Jun 29, 2009 11:01 pm

[quote:e583="Nano511"] If a Script Writer seems interested in this I would be more than happy to work with him.[/quote]
if i get accepted, i could do it

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Post  Nano511 on Tue Jun 30, 2009 7:11 pm

can you take the edit button off when your not logged in because i just wrote all of epidsode one, then when i hit send it said i couldn't edit other peoples post. and i diddnt realize i wasnt logged in... >.>
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Post  Nano511 on Wed Jul 01, 2009 4:28 pm

srry for the double post, but I'm just making the icon blinky so people can read episode 1.

EDIT: i just realized that there is a place for scripts... so im going to copy and paste that directors cut there, and any script write can start writing the script in a post in the topic.

EDIT 2: That place i found was just for our main show... so script writers post here and ill criticize/comment on it
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Post  Nano511 on Wed Jul 01, 2009 6:05 pm

[quote:ef9e="imevil"][quote:ef9e="Nano511"] If a Script Writer seems interested in this I would be more than happy to work with him.[/quote]
if i get accepted, i could do it[/quote]

do you have any past works i could look at first?
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Post  imevil on Thu Jul 02, 2009 9:27 am

well, i have written a script thats being made right now. and i have that other one on this site. i could send you a copy of the one i wrote for my friends. but i dont think it's what your looking for in a way because it's like full on comedy. i could send you a start to how i would start this script. and you read it?

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Post  Nano511 on Thu Jul 02, 2009 9:36 am

No its comedic drama remember? so it is going to have comedy, but also have dramatic parts. To make it dramatic i want dramatic voices, but those dramatic voices are saying comedic stuff, geddit? So ya you could send how you would start this, but the Assassins don't talk.
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Post  Nano511 on Fri Jul 03, 2009 4:31 pm

Episode 2 is up.


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Post  Guest on Fri Jul 03, 2009 4:33 pm

i can picture all this
just i can picture it better on GTA4 because of the scene locations


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Post  Nano511 on Fri Jul 03, 2009 4:33 pm

[quote:9284="M0a0t0t"]lies[/quote]

no dude, its right there.

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Post  Guest on Fri Jul 03, 2009 4:35 pm

yeah sorry i didnt look
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Post  Runner on Tue Jul 14, 2009 12:17 pm

Yer I can see it now, its an epic production, I'm into script writing (you looked at 1 of my posts) so I see classic when I read it, its a good idea and I wanna see it come o life, I'm an actor to the max (real actor not halo body actor) although it might be my first production everybody has to start somewhere and if its on something as huge as this looks it'd be sweet. I can script write and voice act fine, I might be able to body act (although I have never done it before). So please let me be a part of a machinima that is going to be grand

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Post  Nano511 on Tue Jul 14, 2009 12:21 pm

Okay calm down lol. We have like, 3-4 crew members so yeah you can be in it(AND IF ANYONE ELSE DOES TO, DONT BE AFRAID TO ASK). Just apply in the "The Unseen job application" thread. I think thats what its called anyways.

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